A sure footed approach makes it down intact
Most
are hunched and pulling at the ground
For
these kids... that's a steep plunge
Recruiting
young disciples for his outdoor hearth
Taking
their rage under his wing
Sanctifying
it
Stirring
it's heat into a ground of true and forgotten wealth
The
soul of another Vacant Lot revived
Made
holy for a while
Trust-timed
to explode abundance
It's
hard not to notice, how patiently
He's
raking in the alfalfa meal, the potassium
How
he's developing a knack for
Their
gunship alleys
Pause
“You
pray for good conditions
Long
enough to establish roots”
Really appreciating "volatile corners of flare-up kids/Their gunship alleys" and some of the other dense metaphoric language.
ReplyDeleteIn the final paragraph, I wonder about "might" - it confirms the poet is watching from a distance (echoes "you could say" earlier) rather than zooming in. When I was re-reading I was wondering, at the end he is talking, how would it be different if he were saying it himself?
Thanks for the feedback Scooter...much enjoyed and appreciated...I'll consider your invitation to look at the end of the poem where my "hero" is talking...
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